This blog is directly related to my last post.
I didn’t get a chance to fully describe the search for my home. I hope to give a better mental picture this time around.
We left off with the seemingly endless search through valleys of unlivable homes. As stated before, I have seen things done to perfectly good homes that are simply tragic. We searched for months before we found a safe, large, affordable, manageable home that was worth making an offer on.
I was so in love with the place. The kitchen had an island and beautiful, new, marble counter tops. The backyard was overgrown and in serious need of some landscaping, but under all the foliage I found a living, producing avocado tree. The backyard was large enough to have my dog be very comfortable, and there was an attached sun room to the master bedroom with a doggie door. The living room had a fireplace, and the entire wall facing the backyard was a glass pane with a sliding glass door to go out to the covered patio.
Needless to say, I salivated over the prospect of this place truly being mine.
Your blog was a short and sweet read,but I feel you may have many grammatical errors. You could have emphasized more on the house and your future in your possible new home. You may have used to many adjectives. For example you could have used an and in this sentence, We searched for months before we found a safe, large, affordable, and manageable home that was worth making an offer on. Also, I would not put, I was SO in love with this place. It makes it seem like you are talking, rather than writing. I would rather say, I was very pleased with this home. In this sentence, "The kitchen had an island and beautiful, new, marble counter tops", beautiful and new can be said differently since it is a run-on sentence. I would say the kitchen had new marble counter tops that were beautiful and a kitchen with an island. Then in the next sentence it could be revised, because it is also a run-on.
ReplyDeleteOther than that it was a good read and I hope you find yourself a good home.